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  • Read My Disneyland Speech

    Alright, tell me what you all think. I need to know what to enhance on so I wipe the floor with my competition and get an A.

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    Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

    No one has any criticism?

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    • #3
      Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

      It's great! Nicely written!
      Finish each day and be done with it. You have done what you could. Some blunders and absurdities no doubt crept in; forget them as soon as you can. Tomorrow is a new day; begin it well and serenely and with too high a spirit to be encumbered with your old nonsense.

      ~Ralph Waldo Emerson

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        I can't really comment on it as you haven't told us what your question was. If you just have to outline something then it's all good. If you had to form an argument or make a point we might have a problem.
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        • #5
          Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

          Really nice, but I heard that great story about the colorblind driver wasn't actually true.
          However, it has certainly been told as fact, so leave it in.
          I love it when young people want tp learn the history of Disneyland.
          It was and is so much more than an amusement park, it's history is so fascinating. great job,I am sure you will get high marks.
          Goin around the world...and back to Disneyland!

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            Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

            Very well written.
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            • #7
              Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

              The speech is nice but it means more to me than welcome to this happy place. I know how famous and grabbing Walt's opening day sentiment might be, but what you're telling sounds more to me like the Meet the Robinsons motto, keep moving forward.

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              • #8
                Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

                I would reword a couple things, other than that it should be fine.

                I would also scratch "Here's a fun fact for you," there are better lead ins for anecdotes. As it is written it may give the audience the feeling that everything else you have said is insignificant. Like, "Oh NOW I need to start listening."

                The judge or teacher may also find that Walt's speech as an intro as a cop out. Another route is to make the introduction more personable. (preferably humorous) with a tale of your childhood. If you show your audience that you are passionate about your topic, they will be more willing to listen. I'd love to hear a speech about Disneyland, but not by 84 year old Indiana man who has never been there. What does he care about the topic? You can also make it a tear jerking moment by playing the actual recording of Walt's speech with the lights dimmed and a picture of the man just standing there. Media is a great attention getter.

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                  • #10
                    Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

                    Love it
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                    • #11
                      Re: Read My Disneyland Speech

                      Just a few things. Disneyland opened with 22 attractions and not 18. I just got back from Disneyland yesterday and went to see the 50th Anniversary show -- don't know why, but I did -- and I remember seeing that number at the big model of the park in 1955.

                      Also, I would avoid using cliches if at all possible. "Back into the green" and "Kill two birds with one stone" should be avoided.

                      Otherwise it is very good.

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