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  • Honest opinions on this story i've started

    Its short....but are you intrigued? do you want to keep readng?

    I've had a story in my head for YEARS like since freshman year, and i've decided to take th bull by the horns and commit it to paper. I don't have a title, probably wont till its done, but how does this little paragraph make you feel?

    Honest opinions, it is a work in progress so i'll take anything you want to throw at me

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    I think it sounds wonderful. Is it going to be a post civil war story? I cannot wait to read more.... I love the way you describe the garden, it really came to life in my mind. You are very talented with words...
    John 3:16


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      actually its a pre/during/ slightly after story followingstated character, kalista and a childhood friend from age 8 ish to about 25/30, depending on how i feel towards the end, lol She is around 18 at this time in the story. Benjamin Foster is the friends grandfather. get into details later, lol

      ok, so thats 1 continue


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        Re: Honest opinions on this story i've started

        You are very brave to open yourself up to criticism on the board! So, even if I didn't like the paragraph, I would still have to give you huge props for courage. :bow:

        Here's my honest opinion as a really avid reader: it hooked me. My dad and I used to exchange books lots and discuss them together, which I really miss now that he is gone. I read so many books and I am not one to give up on a book too fast if it doesn't hook me right from the start. However, I love it when a story does catch me right off, which yours did. Great start!


        • #5
          Re: Honest opinions on this story i've started

          Don't fear me, but I'm an English teacher...we do have a writer's board over in MiceClubs, so if you want, I can ask those authors to come over and visit.

          For me, I believe the act of writing is, by far, more important than the English grammar or rules. Just write, I say!

          This is an excellent start! The problem with it?

          IT STOPS.....keep going!

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          • #6
            Re: Honest opinions on this story i've started

            It sounds excellent! I am working on a teen novel right now that has only been in my head for two months, but I know how it is when you have a story for years, but you never know when to start it.
            The daydream princess


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              Re: Honest opinions on this story i've started

              well, i guess i shall continue, lol

              i'll try and keep you updated, maybe add bits and pieces once and a while.

              thanks for the comments guys!



              • #8
                Re: Honest opinions on this story i've started

                I liked it
                Good morning, son
                In twenty years from now
                Maybe we'll both sit down and have a few beers
                And I can tell you 'bout today
                And how I picked you up and everything changed
                It was pain
                Sunny days and rain
                I knew you'd feel the same things...



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